Hello Karen, congratulations, your project has turned out very well. The beginning is great after you have adjusted the beginning and limited the conversation with the mother. I think the use of dialogue as a central resource is very pertinent, the same goes for the fact that the group of boys brings references such as Harry Potter to the table. My only observation is regarding the ending, perhaps when he says "we are friends" you could introduce some reflection on his time at the camp the previous year. She could say something like "I wouldn't be the girl anymore than _____________________" and there you introduce the memory.
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Professeur PlusHello Karen, congratulations, your project has turned out very well. The beginning is great after you have adjusted the beginning and limited the conversation with the mother. I think the use of dialogue as a central resource is very pertinent, the same goes for the fact that the group of boys brings references such as Harry Potter to the table. My only observation is regarding the ending, perhaps when he says "we are friends" you could introduce some reflection on his time at the camp the previous year. She could say something like "I wouldn't be the girl anymore than _____________________" and there you introduce the memory.
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Plus@majocaro Thank you very much for the advice :) I will correct it
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