@paulagrazielladasilva Hi Paula, I do like a good love story! – love and music are a great combination. I'm a big fan of Brazilian music, so I was imagining the sound of Elis Regina and Gal Costa while reading this :) This feels like the beginning of a much bigger story, and my suggestion would be to keep writing... tell the story of how Ruth became famous, enjoy telling the details of your journey... and maybe one day she meets a new love, a younger woman, like she was the younger woman when she fell in love.
I like that moment when they meet and look to see if the other is wearing a ring. Maybe at some point in the story they can buy rings, so that later the ring will be the reminder of her beloved. I also like the picture of the older woman going to meet Ruth at the piano school – maybe there you could tell the story of what they did together after the piano class... did they go for dinner? a walk to the museum? So much more to explore if you wanted to keep developing this intense love story :) Thanks for sharing your writing with us. I hope you've enjoyed the course and found it useful. Warm greetings from Madrid!
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I would very much appreciate Professor Shaun's opinion.
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Professeur Plus@paulagrazielladasilva Hi Paula, I do like a good love story! – love and music are a great combination. I'm a big fan of Brazilian music, so I was imagining the sound of Elis Regina and Gal Costa while reading this :) This feels like the beginning of a much bigger story, and my suggestion would be to keep writing... tell the story of how Ruth became famous, enjoy telling the details of your journey... and maybe one day she meets a new love, a younger woman, like she was the younger woman when she fell in love.
I like that moment when they meet and look to see if the other is wearing a ring. Maybe at some point in the story they can buy rings, so that later the ring will be the reminder of her beloved. I also like the picture of the older woman going to meet Ruth at the piano school – maybe there you could tell the story of what they did together after the piano class... did they go for dinner? a walk to the museum? So much more to explore if you wanted to keep developing this intense love story :) Thanks for sharing your writing with us. I hope you've enjoyed the course and found it useful. Warm greetings from Madrid!
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