Ok, now go. I'm going to rewrite more or less everything I had told you: S
Very good project in general. Some comments:
- Why did you choose that style of illustration? Sorry for being that they are artisan cheeses.
- At a global level, I don't know if it is appropriate for this project or not, but perhaps for you to do as an exercise to show on your social networks: you could perhaps try to tell the story of how a cheese is made as the User scrolls, with elements appearing and disappearing from the screen controlled by scroll. Just an idea. Look up references on sites like awwwards.com for ideas.
- The typeface system is quite consistent, but you used two different styles for secondary titles (one with system typeface and one with Museum). It would unify those styles into one.
- For titles, you could try a larger title size, double over there.
- Notice several blank spaces that do not feel justified, especially to the left of titles.
Hello Adrian. Thank you for your comments.
Some time ago I sent the page to be programmed so I don't know if I will be able to change something. But hey, as an exercise it will be worth it and also to take into account for the next times.
- I wanted the illustrations to be of a more modern style since the cheese factory is also modern in its facilities although they keep the artisan elaboration. I wanted them to be simple and clean icons. More of the page style. I also saw references to other types of illustrations with watercolors and marker, somewhat more rustic, but in the end it seemed to me that I was going to load everything a little. I probably lacked time to develop the illustrations better.
- I write down the story of how to make cheese by scrolling. It seems very interesting and a challenge for me. It requires a lot of research.
- The typography is true that I have used the museum within the products for the title of these and in the highlighted phrases for the cheese factory. But in the rest of the outstanding phrases (as in Our land) I have not used it. And now that I see it, it is true that I should unify them. I will try to talk to the programmer and if I have time I will try to change them.
- I put an image of one of the pages with the grid. The truth is that I had to do it myself and I'm not sure I did it well. I thought I had correctly positioned the titles with respect to the grid.
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Professor PlusOk, now go. I'm going to rewrite more or less everything I had told you: S
Very good project in general. Some comments:
- Why did you choose that style of illustration? Sorry for being that they are artisan cheeses.
- At a global level, I don't know if it is appropriate for this project or not, but perhaps for you to do as an exercise to show on your social networks: you could perhaps try to tell the story of how a cheese is made as the User scrolls, with elements appearing and disappearing from the screen controlled by scroll. Just an idea. Look up references on sites like awwwards.com for ideas.
- The typeface system is quite consistent, but you used two different styles for secondary titles (one with system typeface and one with Museum). It would unify those styles into one.
- For titles, you could try a larger title size, double over there.
- Notice several blank spaces that do not feel justified, especially to the left of titles.
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Hello Adrian. Thank you for your comments.
Some time ago I sent the page to be programmed so I don't know if I will be able to change something. But hey, as an exercise it will be worth it and also to take into account for the next times.
- I wanted the illustrations to be of a more modern style since the cheese factory is also modern in its facilities although they keep the artisan elaboration. I wanted them to be simple and clean icons. More of the page style. I also saw references to other types of illustrations with watercolors and marker, somewhat more rustic, but in the end it seemed to me that I was going to load everything a little. I probably lacked time to develop the illustrations better.
- I write down the story of how to make cheese by scrolling. It seems very interesting and a challenge for me. It requires a lot of research.
- The typography is true that I have used the museum within the products for the title of these and in the highlighted phrases for the cheese factory. But in the rest of the outstanding phrases (as in Our land) I have not used it. And now that I see it, it is true that I should unify them. I will try to talk to the programmer and if I have time I will try to change them.
- I put an image of one of the pages with the grid. The truth is that I had to do it myself and I'm not sure I did it well. I thought I had correctly positioned the titles with respect to the grid.
Thank you very much Adrián.
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