Lisdevenus is very nice about your story, I would only have put more illustrations, thinking that a child likes to look at colors and shapes.
I congratulate you
Congratulations on your first story! The story is very nice. Thank you so much for sharing it!
I have a question, in case you want to check it: what about the rabbit and the frog that appear to help Bea? Perhaps all the animals go with her to visit her grandmother, or give her something for her, so that as they appear they will also participate after the rest of the story.
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It is the first time that I write a story it has been a wonderful experience so I accept all the comments about the creation.
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Lisdevenus is very nice about your story, I would only have put more illustrations, thinking that a child likes to look at colors and shapes.
I congratulate you
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Prowadzący PlusCongratulations on your first story! The story is very nice. Thank you so much for sharing it!
I have a question, in case you want to check it: what about the rabbit and the frog that appear to help Bea? Perhaps all the animals go with her to visit her grandmother, or give her something for her, so that as they appear they will also participate after the rest of the story.
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Thank you for your comment, I will review it and take into account your comments.
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