First of all, thanks for sharing your story with us.
I really liked your theme, I also love dogs, I have Daphne, who actually inspired a new book that will be ready very soon. As you said yourself, the text was very dry. Simplicity is not a problem, it's a quality, but I believe you could develop the narrative more, the material is rich, you can create more situations, fictionalize more. I also liked the illustrations, congratulations.
Thanks for the answer Ilan, I also agree that I should have explored creating situations like Lessie's preference for Fifi's bed, which caused ugly fights. I believe I missed showing the text to other readers, outside the family!! I loved making the drawings Thank you for the course and comments!
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Prowadzący PlusHi Vera.
First of all, thanks for sharing your story with us.
I really liked your theme, I also love dogs, I have Daphne, who actually inspired a new book that will be ready very soon. As you said yourself, the text was very dry. Simplicity is not a problem, it's a quality, but I believe you could develop the narrative more, the material is rich, you can create more situations, fictionalize more. I also liked the illustrations, congratulations.
Hope this helps.
And I also wanted to share that another new course just came out of the oven here:
https://www.domestika.org/pt/courses/3647-storytelling-para-iniciantes-a-arte-de-contar-historias/ibrenman
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Thanks for the answer Ilan, I also agree that I should have explored creating situations like Lessie's preference for Fifi's bed, which caused ugly fights. I believe I missed showing the text to other readers, outside the family!! I loved making the drawings Thank you for the course and comments!
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