Ah, this is lovely! Thank you, Marta (sorry it took so long to reply to your other comment but I'm so pleased you shared your project).
I love a story set in a magical forest, and also one with a slight sense of peril as your main character is lost. This really helps to keep your reader hooked! I think there are endless paths that you can go on with this story and I like that you have a little boy's lack of courage at its heart. It could be relatable for many readers.
Thank you again and I really hope you have enjoyed the course. Lisa
@lisathompsonauthor Hi Lisa! I really enjoyed the course, it helped me better understand how to structure a story and what to focus on so that it can then work in a compelling way.
Furthermore, following your lessons has given me many ideas and this is getting me very excited and I'm writing a lot in this period.
I can send you what is written to find out if it can work, once the draft is finished, because an external point of view of a writer would really help me to understand what to remove, modify or strengthen.
A thousand thanks!
Hello Marta.
I also liked your text very much.
In particular, you described very well all the physical reactions that characterize fear (dilated eyes, sweat, shortness of breath,...) and how to overcome them.
May I ask you if many details derive from research on the subject or from the transposition of a personal experience?
Just to know if my perception is true.
Thank you
Cynthia
@cinzia_azzariti74 Hi Cinzia! Sorry for the delay in replying but I haven't had a bit of an intense period and I haven't looked at the forum anymore... first of all thank you for the kind words. I wrote the description of the state of fear partly thinking about what I saw in films or reading in other books and partly thinking about how I felt firsthand when, right in that woods, I feared I was lost just because I had taken a wrong turn, so by combining the two I tried to tease out how the protagonist would feel.
I hope this was a useful answer for you :D
Martha
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Docent PlusAh, this is lovely! Thank you, Marta (sorry it took so long to reply to your other comment but I'm so pleased you shared your project).
I love a story set in a magical forest, and also one with a slight sense of peril as your main character is lost. This really helps to keep your reader hooked! I think there are endless paths that you can go on with this story and I like that you have a little boy's lack of courage at its heart. It could be relatable for many readers.
Thank you again and I really hope you have enjoyed the course. Lisa
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@lisathompsonauthor Hi Lisa! I really enjoyed the course, it helped me better understand how to structure a story and what to focus on so that it can then work in a compelling way.
Furthermore, following your lessons has given me many ideas and this is getting me very excited and I'm writing a lot in this period.
I can send you what is written to find out if it can work, once the draft is finished, because an external point of view of a writer would really help me to understand what to remove, modify or strengthen.
A thousand thanks!
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Hello Marta.
I also liked your text very much.
In particular, you described very well all the physical reactions that characterize fear (dilated eyes, sweat, shortness of breath,...) and how to overcome them.
May I ask you if many details derive from research on the subject or from the transposition of a personal experience?
Just to know if my perception is true.
Thank you
Cynthia
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@cinzia_azzariti74 Hi Cinzia! Sorry for the delay in replying but I haven't had a bit of an intense period and I haven't looked at the forum anymore... first of all thank you for the kind words. I wrote the description of the state of fear partly thinking about what I saw in films or reading in other books and partly thinking about how I felt firsthand when, right in that woods, I feared I was lost just because I had taken a wrong turn, so by combining the two I tried to tease out how the protagonist would feel.
I hope this was a useful answer for you :D
Martha
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