Hello @albertoarruti ,
Thanks for sharing these pages! I loved your drawings! I love how you combine and make the written and the visual coexist. Thanks for drawing me with the backpack hahaha (bah, I don't know if it's me). I really liked reading those pages before the exercises where you set goals and explore ideas around writing.
You have very interesting ideas for texts, hopefully you are writing some. :)
I really like that you have used improvised titles to write texts.
Thank you for clearing "Servilia". A piece of advice for this text is not to use so many adjectives (for example: charming, clean, perfect, friendly, comforting, imposing, calm...), I suggest you eliminate as many as you can and, instead, show us those characteristics through other types of descriptions (in what particular way is that city "clean", "charming", "perfect"? It is better to give concrete examples than just using adjectives).
@aniko Thank you so much for the tips and the course, Aniko! I really enjoyed it and can only recommend it. Yes, it is you with your backpack, the source of inspiration at the beginning of the notebook. I return to the lessons and materials from time to time, have discovered new worlds from there, and already enjoy a very pleasant little time writing every day, trying to put the skeleton together for a graphic novel. What more could you want!
I found it easy and enjoyable to write from titles that popped into my head. It's harder for me to delve deeper, write the texts really well and consider them finished –for example, the 'Servilia' button–, but I'm working on it and everything will work out.
I will follow your advice, I will review the text and I will be attentive from now on to look for alternatives without abusing the adjectives. Thank you very much again!
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Thanks for sharing these pages! I loved your drawings! I love how you combine and make the written and the visual coexist. Thanks for drawing me with the backpack hahaha (bah, I don't know if it's me). I really liked reading those pages before the exercises where you set goals and explore ideas around writing.
You have very interesting ideas for texts, hopefully you are writing some. :)
I really like that you have used improvised titles to write texts.
Thank you for clearing "Servilia". A piece of advice for this text is not to use so many adjectives (for example: charming, clean, perfect, friendly, comforting, imposing, calm...), I suggest you eliminate as many as you can and, instead, show us those characteristics through other types of descriptions (in what particular way is that city "clean", "charming", "perfect"? It is better to give concrete examples than just using adjectives).
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@aniko Thank you so much for the tips and the course, Aniko! I really enjoyed it and can only recommend it. Yes, it is you with your backpack, the source of inspiration at the beginning of the notebook. I return to the lessons and materials from time to time, have discovered new worlds from there, and already enjoy a very pleasant little time writing every day, trying to put the skeleton together for a graphic novel. What more could you want!
I found it easy and enjoyable to write from titles that popped into my head. It's harder for me to delve deeper, write the texts really well and consider them finished –for example, the 'Servilia' button–, but I'm working on it and everything will work out.
I will follow your advice, I will review the text and I will be attentive from now on to look for alternatives without abusing the adjectives. Thank you very much again!
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