Bloody End
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When Christina came home from the office today, Paul opened the door, Christina came in with a dry smile, her friend David was already sitting in the house. Christina threw her bag aside and wished David. David said that he was passing from here so he thought about coming to her place. Christina asked for the tea and coffee, then David said that there is no need for it. Christina said, she is glad that someone understands that I am also a human, she looked at paul. On this Paul said that what are you talking like this he said he take care of her even after being so busy.Now Cristina said busy . she looked at David and said. Please ask him to stop writing or else very soon they both will be on the road and starts begging . David asked Paul to keep quiet. Paul said guys i don't want to get into husband wife fights.and he hugged both of them and leaves the house.Cristina continues fighting with paul .Paul went to bed instead of fighting with Christina and fell asleep.
It's been almost 35 years since the age of Cristina and Paul but when they fight it seems that these people are still in their childhood. While sleeping at night, Cristina starts to argue on silly things. She often takes out her office anger on Paul. Paul is already upset as he was not getting the end of his story in which the boy cannot tell his girlfriend that he is gay. Paul keeps listening to Cristina as usual. Because he knows that even God cannot win in front of her.
In the morning, Cristina was a little quiet because she realized that she fought with Paul last night on silly matters.Cristina plans a surprise for Paul. After reaching the office, she finished the work quickly and she called Paul saying that she is going to Bangalore today, tomorrow she will come back to Mumbai by the first flight.
Cristina’s plan was to take Paul to the Maldives today. He got the tickets for Maldives which her office assistant arranged. Cristina reached home and opened the door with a duplicate key. But there was no one inside. Cristina starts walking towards the stairs because she felt that Paul must have been sitting inside the library. When Cristina climbs the stairs and opens the door of the library, David iis sitting at the study table and Paul is kissing him.From the corner of his eyes David spotted Cristina standing at the door. With great fear David pushes Paul and try to catch Cristina who is about to fall from the stairs. Cristina feels dizzy and falls from the stairs. Paul and David ran to save Cristina but by then Cristina’s life was gone.Paul and David looked at each other with horror in their eyes.
A few days later Paul ends his book with the story of Cristina’s accident. It was written on the first page of the book. To my wife Cristina . Who was the inspiration to end this Novel.
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Insegnante Plus@samar_edr Hi Samar, This sounds like a good plot for a novel! There's a film with Jeremy Irons from the 90s called Damage which your story reminded me of. Check it out. I think you'll like it. My main suggestion would be to slow down and enjoy telling the details of the story, like what are the silly things they fight about, or the friendship between Christina and David. By telling us that David is her friend, you also distract us nicely from what's going on between the two men. Maybe also explore the possibility of a happy end. Maybe Christina recovers and accepts Paul for who he is. Keep experimenting and expanding the story. Thanks for sharing your writing with us and for your participation in the course. I appreciate it. Warm greetings from Spain.
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@Shaun Levin Your appreciation is a big achievement for me thanks for your kind words
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