Wow, this is so exciting! I joke a lot with my students that only writers can read about something really dark and sad and be excited for it, because the theme, of course, is very sad, but it sounds like it will also be exquisite.
Because the impetus of the story is his grief and grappling with being alive, your decision to stay in the present and then flashback to moments is a good one, because that will deepen the sadness. If you told it linearly it would be about both characters and the mother's death, instead of the death after. Good work thinking that through.
Solid tone choice, too, as grief can render us nonsensical and we aren't always poetic when we're being crushed by feeling. You may borrow some poetic moments in description, perhaps? Or, as he emerges from grief to see the cat, maybe there will be a shift in language, too. You've set that up nicely.
As a pet person, I'm glad he finds a cat friend. :)
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Insegnante PlusWow, this is so exciting! I joke a lot with my students that only writers can read about something really dark and sad and be excited for it, because the theme, of course, is very sad, but it sounds like it will also be exquisite.
Because the impetus of the story is his grief and grappling with being alive, your decision to stay in the present and then flashback to moments is a good one, because that will deepen the sadness. If you told it linearly it would be about both characters and the mother's death, instead of the death after. Good work thinking that through.
Solid tone choice, too, as grief can render us nonsensical and we aren't always poetic when we're being crushed by feeling. You may borrow some poetic moments in description, perhaps? Or, as he emerges from grief to see the cat, maybe there will be a shift in language, too. You've set that up nicely.
As a pet person, I'm glad he finds a cat friend. :)
Good work!
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