Thank you very much for your story and your photos @sandrajbc
To improve your story, I encourage you to be more specific when narrating. Notice how, of the whole story, the phrase that stands out the most is "burning our eyelashes and staying up all night without rest." I could have said "working tirelessly", but the image of the eyelashes and staying up late are more concrete and therefore powerful. Remember the power of the Key Details in each story.
I suggest you narrate some of the "unforgettable anecdotes", or the meeting with a friend "from different parts of the world" or what aspects - or specific people in your family - you missed the most, at what times or why.
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PlusVery interesting and well explained, it opens a world to another way of thinking as the best way to tell the story that each one has.
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Teacher PlusThank you very much for your story and your photos @sandrajbc
To improve your story, I encourage you to be more specific when narrating. Notice how, of the whole story, the phrase that stands out the most is "burning our eyelashes and staying up all night without rest." I could have said "working tirelessly", but the image of the eyelashes and staying up late are more concrete and therefore powerful. Remember the power of the Key Details in each story.
I suggest you narrate some of the "unforgettable anecdotes", or the meeting with a friend "from different parts of the world" or what aspects - or specific people in your family - you missed the most, at what times or why.
Good luck with your blessed profession.
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