Hi Bairon. Thank you very much for joining the course and I am glad you enjoyed it :). I like the "dystopian" theme of your story.
- I like the characteristics that you gave to your main character and details like the bandages, the bionic arm and her other clothes, since this visually shows me that she is a strong, agile and daring girl, which fits the situation that is passing your character in your work. Without the need to narrate, you can see who is the good character and who is the bad, who is at a disadvantage and who is not, who is human and who is not.
- There is a good composition and dimensions regarding the location of each character (the closer it is to my visual field, the larger it is and the further away it is, the character or objects in the environment will be smaller)
- I like that you have also tried using textures like the pavement. It is a good way to improvise something that is a bit difficult to draw, but remember not to depend on it too much.
- The robot that is in the first term (the one that turns its back) should be somewhat darker and only highlight the edges that are touched by the blue light of the protagonist.
- The hair color of the main character would lower the saturation a bit, since it differs a bit from the general color palette of your work.
- A curious question I have is if the drones are companions of the girl or are they enemies like the "Ceptors"? This question is because the drone's eye color (blue) is similar to the girl's hair color. I mean they both wear blue and that makes me pair them as allies. But if they are enemies I think they should have the color red like the Ceptors.
- The aspects that you should practice more are: perspective, light and color. All of them are complex and with time and a lot of practice you will achieve good results.
I hope my observations have helped you.
Successes! :)
@heber_nimrod yes, thank you very much the drones were enemies, I thought about what you told me about the work on drones but I wanted to differentiate the type of enemy machinery, that's why I do not put the color of eyes on drones like ceptors, I still appreciate your observation, and I will practice more in the future to improve, thank you very much.
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Teacher PlusHi Bairon. Thank you very much for joining the course and I am glad you enjoyed it :). I like the "dystopian" theme of your story.
- I like the characteristics that you gave to your main character and details like the bandages, the bionic arm and her other clothes, since this visually shows me that she is a strong, agile and daring girl, which fits the situation that is passing your character in your work. Without the need to narrate, you can see who is the good character and who is the bad, who is at a disadvantage and who is not, who is human and who is not.
- There is a good composition and dimensions regarding the location of each character (the closer it is to my visual field, the larger it is and the further away it is, the character or objects in the environment will be smaller)
- I like that you have also tried using textures like the pavement. It is a good way to improvise something that is a bit difficult to draw, but remember not to depend on it too much.
- The robot that is in the first term (the one that turns its back) should be somewhat darker and only highlight the edges that are touched by the blue light of the protagonist.
- The hair color of the main character would lower the saturation a bit, since it differs a bit from the general color palette of your work.
- A curious question I have is if the drones are companions of the girl or are they enemies like the "Ceptors"? This question is because the drone's eye color (blue) is similar to the girl's hair color. I mean they both wear blue and that makes me pair them as allies. But if they are enemies I think they should have the color red like the Ceptors.
- The aspects that you should practice more are: perspective, light and color. All of them are complex and with time and a lot of practice you will achieve good results.
I hope my observations have helped you.
Successes! :)
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@heber_nimrod yes, thank you very much the drones were enemies, I thought about what you told me about the work on drones but I wanted to differentiate the type of enemy machinery, that's why I do not put the color of eyes on drones like ceptors, I still appreciate your observation, and I will practice more in the future to improve, thank you very much.
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