First of all, congratulations for having made your film! That should already make you feel proud, it's not easy to get projects off the ground.
Congratulations also for having followed the course exercises. That allows me to give you more detailed feedback.
I see that the story has evolved from what you had in the script. A success to pose the protagonist with that fear of the dark, that generates conflict and an obstacle to overcome, elements that are always important in a story. On the other hand, with the ending that you have now in the film, I think we have lost the dramatic arc, I don't see how the character or his circumstances have changed at the end of the story. On a formal level, I see that you handle cinematographic language and its codes well. Congratulations!
How can I say, congratulations, it's not easy to get the movies off the ground. Now for the next one! It is the way to grow and learn and improve. Cheer up!
:)
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First of all, thank you very much for your comments, I am also very excited to be able to carry out this project, and I also hope to continue evolving as a filmmaker in future projects.
About the ending, I understand you, but it was recommended to me by the assistant director and the other teacher that there be another ending of a different style, that would show the psychological impact of the protagonist, but that comment still seems valuable to me, since it shows various perspectives about what can be done with a film.
Once again, thank you very much for your comments Cesar, it has been a great pleasure to have taken this course with you, which has helped me a lot to establish my vision as a director and which I hope to refine in the future as I mentioned.
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Teacher PlusHello Miguel
First of all, congratulations for having made your film! That should already make you feel proud, it's not easy to get projects off the ground.
Congratulations also for having followed the course exercises. That allows me to give you more detailed feedback.
I see that the story has evolved from what you had in the script. A success to pose the protagonist with that fear of the dark, that generates conflict and an obstacle to overcome, elements that are always important in a story. On the other hand, with the ending that you have now in the film, I think we have lost the dramatic arc, I don't see how the character or his circumstances have changed at the end of the story. On a formal level, I see that you handle cinematographic language and its codes well. Congratulations!
How can I say, congratulations, it's not easy to get the movies off the ground. Now for the next one! It is the way to grow and learn and improve. Cheer up!
:)
c
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@cesarpesquera Hello Cesar.
First of all, thank you very much for your comments, I am also very excited to be able to carry out this project, and I also hope to continue evolving as a filmmaker in future projects.
About the ending, I understand you, but it was recommended to me by the assistant director and the other teacher that there be another ending of a different style, that would show the psychological impact of the protagonist, but that comment still seems valuable to me, since it shows various perspectives about what can be done with a film.
Once again, thank you very much for your comments Cesar, it has been a great pleasure to have taken this course with you, which has helped me a lot to establish my vision as a director and which I hope to refine in the future as I mentioned.
Cheers! :)
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