It's a nice job, but I don't like how you've inserted the text overlaying the images. It's too confusing. The composition is slightly unbalanced to the left. I would change several things, but you're on the right track.
@sergibleda First of all Thanks for the comment on my work, I really appreciate it. I also agree with your comments, which I believe to be correct. I would rather like to know what and how you would change.
For example, would you do all the text manually (and not on the computer as I did?) Or is it just a question of font? Or would you change some of the elements I drew? I would appreciate it very much if you could give me some indication. In any case, thanks, bye.
@paolosavigni sorry for my delay in responding.
It does not matter if the text is manual or made with a computer. The issue is that the text steps on parts of the illustration and makes it confusing to read.
I would have left more white space to put the text there or I would have used text boxes.
I think the CG gradient under the clouds is also too stand out and distracting, I liked it better when it was done with gouache because it blended in better with the rest of the page.
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Teacher PlusIt's a nice job, but I don't like how you've inserted the text overlaying the images. It's too confusing. The composition is slightly unbalanced to the left. I would change several things, but you're on the right track.
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@sergibleda First of all Thanks for the comment on my work, I really appreciate it. I also agree with your comments, which I believe to be correct. I would rather like to know what and how you would change.
For example, would you do all the text manually (and not on the computer as I did?) Or is it just a question of font? Or would you change some of the elements I drew? I would appreciate it very much if you could give me some indication. In any case, thanks, bye.
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Teacher Plus@paolosavigni sorry for my delay in responding.
It does not matter if the text is manual or made with a computer. The issue is that the text steps on parts of the illustration and makes it confusing to read.
I would have left more white space to put the text there or I would have used text boxes.
I think the CG gradient under the clouds is also too stand out and distracting, I liked it better when it was done with gouache because it blended in better with the rest of the page.
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