Congratulations Laura! This was so much fun to read. You really pulled me into the story, and already have me wondering how much I can trust this narrator.
As before, your description of running through the rain and passing the woman are very vivid. The little details like the phone vibrating upstairs, and her realisation that he would never have gone out without it build up to give us a really good sense of impending doom.
And I LOVE your last sentence! That was incredibly effective.
Good luck with finishing the book, and I hope you get it published. Many thanks for taking the course!
Emily
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Lehrkraft PlusCongratulations Laura! This was so much fun to read. You really pulled me into the story, and already have me wondering how much I can trust this narrator.
As before, your description of running through the rain and passing the woman are very vivid. The little details like the phone vibrating upstairs, and her realisation that he would never have gone out without it build up to give us a really good sense of impending doom.
And I LOVE your last sentence! That was incredibly effective.
Good luck with finishing the book, and I hope you get it published. Many thanks for taking the course!
Emily
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