Hi Márcio, What a beautiful piece of writing. I love the mix of nostalgia and pragmatism, the personal mixed in with the political. I wanted more! I could really picture that boy on his skateboard, defying the nail, and the sense of resignation when he has to move. And yet – I loved the image of him and the kite and the sea. There's a wonderful feeling of hope in your writing. This is my favourite line: "Não era de acertar muitas manobras, mas eu era inconsequente o bastante para me jogar no ar." It seems to capture the essence of the story. Like I said, I wanted more, and I hope you'll keep expanding this story. More details about the neighbourhood he moves to, maybe some details about his old friends (where are they now?), and even more politics.
Thanks for sharing your writing with us, and for participating in the forums. I hope the course has been helpful and has led you to some surprising stories! Take care.
I was very happy with your words Shaun, thank you very much. I loved your course, so much so that I'm already enrolled in the other one too. What I learned here I'm already using in my writing that I'm still discovering. It's fascinating how the stories are emerging and multiplying, now just keep training to improve a little more.
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Lehrkraft PlusHi Márcio, What a beautiful piece of writing. I love the mix of nostalgia and pragmatism, the personal mixed in with the political. I wanted more! I could really picture that boy on his skateboard, defying the nail, and the sense of resignation when he has to move. And yet – I loved the image of him and the kite and the sea. There's a wonderful feeling of hope in your writing. This is my favourite line: "Não era de acertar muitas manobras, mas eu era inconsequente o bastante para me jogar no ar." It seems to capture the essence of the story. Like I said, I wanted more, and I hope you'll keep expanding this story. More details about the neighbourhood he moves to, maybe some details about his old friends (where are they now?), and even more politics.
Thanks for sharing your writing with us, and for participating in the forums. I hope the course has been helpful and has led you to some surprising stories! Take care.
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I was very happy with your words Shaun, thank you very much. I loved your course, so much so that I'm already enrolled in the other one too. What I learned here I'm already using in my writing that I'm still discovering. It's fascinating how the stories are emerging and multiplying, now just keep training to improve a little more.
Thank you very much from my heart.
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