Oh! congratulations on getting to the project. Very good this story of the cake. And what do you want now to go to a party. :)
What I would tell you that it may be missing is that you go adding the characters that follow it from the beginning. It's like we lose them on some pages, until suddenly it is mentioned that everyone is there following her, how do you see it? Maybe when the owl starts saying "I'll accompany you" and somebody "I want to see that cake that sounds so good" and thus, so that it is understood that they are following it all the way.
What a lovely story. I found the story very rhythmic and entertaining. And he has the point of waiting to see what happens and astonishment.
Thanks for sharing
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Insegnante PlusOh! congratulations on getting to the project. Very good this story of the cake. And what do you want now to go to a party. :)
What I would tell you that it may be missing is that you go adding the characters that follow it from the beginning. It's like we lose them on some pages, until suddenly it is mentioned that everyone is there following her, how do you see it? Maybe when the owl starts saying "I'll accompany you" and somebody "I want to see that cake that sounds so good" and thus, so that it is understood that they are following it all the way.
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Ah! I love the idea!!! Yes! Thanks 😃
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What a lovely story. I found the story very rhythmic and entertaining. And he has the point of waiting to see what happens and astonishment.
Thanks for sharing
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@lurdes_checa Thank you very much for your words. :)
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Besides enjoying reading your story, I really wanted to eat cake !! = P
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I liked it a lot! Congratulations!
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