My project for course: Book Writing for Beginners: Develop Your Ideas on Paper
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Synopsis
Title: The Subway Memoirs (or New York Subway Diaries)
Genre: Memoir, Non-fiction, and Autobiography
Gustav is a dedicated watcher — a seeker of order and meaning, of signs and poetical analogies as they relate to the inconspicuous. Whether contemplating the frisky flying of the birds and comparing them with the rigidity of the trains, chatting with a group of people with diametrically opposite points of view, or a chubby college professor reading a book as if it is the first meal after a month of fasting, the philosophical Gustav postmarks his commutes with a series of meditations at once bright with curiosity and burdened by the limits of human perception.
The Subway Memoir is a book that collects 24 observations, dramas, mediations, and comedies that unfold during the daily commute on the New York City subway. The book includes stories from vagabonds who live in the subway, transit employees, locals, students, and more.
Passage from the book:
One of the most exhilarating moments for a subway rider in New York is hearing the approaching train as they step onto the platform. It's a triumph of timing and fortune that feels like a well-deserved accomplishment. However, there's an even greater sense of satisfaction awaiting New Yorkers who step onto the train and find vacant seats – a touch of luxury that rivals the experience of flying first class. This innate New York spirit thrives on extracting the utmost from life, maximizing every opportunity, and embracing the city's unique offerings. After all, why choose New York if not for these experiences? Yet, it's the everyday pleasures that truly captivate them. Take my dad, for instance – he's never quite grasped the fervent rush to catch a train in the city. "There's always another one just around the corner," he'd say. Logically, he's right. But for New Yorkers, catching that train is akin to a silver medal; it's a good result, but the gold is what truly counts. Walking onto the platform as the train glides in, and securing an unoccupied seat upon boarding – these are the small yet indispensable victories that often elude those who solely rely on private transportation. The trend today is the transformation of public experiences into private moments, an evolution that our society has grown remarkably adept at. We immerse ourselves in personal music playlists and indulge in reading on our smartphones.
On the other hand, the worst when riding the subway is not, as you might think, having to wait for a train that is delayed when you are in a hurry or having to stand in a crowded train, but people who talk loud to nobody specifically, they are addressing everybody in the train. That is very annoying. It pulls you down and brings you back to the fact that you are commuting in public transportation. These people have an urge to express themselves. And people could not care less about what they have to say. Where else would they find an audience? They have to look for a place where people have nowhere to go, they can’t simply walk away. This is cruel, torture. No door to shut, no walking to the next room, basically you can’t escape.
As I set foot onto the sidewalk, it became apparent that this was no ordinary morning scene. The remnants of last night's culinary adventures painted a mosaic on the pavement. Avocado skins and pits, scattered grains of rice, to-go containers, paper bags, and plastic cups created an impromptu street art installation. There, on the corner of Broadway and 231st Street in the Bronx, I attempted to find order within the chaos. Perhaps, I thought, there was a hidden message waiting to be deciphered. An urban oracle, if you will. I was determined to shift my perspective, to seek beauty amidst the disarray.
Our typical reaction to litter is straightforward – it shouldn't be there, and someone ought to clean it up. Yet, on this particular morning, a different thought crossed my mind. What if there was a purpose behind this seeming disorder? Not a deliberate message crafted by human hands, but rather the work of an unseen, superhuman force. My imagination ran wild, and I felt an unexpected surge of inspiration. What could this message be? I wondered.
As I examined the arrangement of objects and their relationships to one another, I began to notice something intriguing. Certain items seemed to point toward others, like a complex dot-to-dot puzzle waiting to reveal its figure. Admittedly, such thoughts were influenced by my recent studies. I had been delving into the art of reading tarot cards with Enrique Enriquez, and my mind was primed to find meaning in the world around me. I pondered shapes that expanded and contracted, elements that heated up or cooled down, and the speed at which things moved. This time, I even drew parallels to ancient divination practices like the I-Ching, where sticks were cast to consult the Book of Changes, or the seers who read the future in tea leaves, or the Babylonians observing the liver of a dead animal for the purpose of practicing haruspices. It struck me that I was part of a rich tradition. My ideas, I realized, weren't as far-fetched as they might seem. After all, aren't we always trying to uncover meaning in every situation, in every word spoken?
Just then, my bus arrived, and the urgency of arriving at work on time, a fundamental part of my identity, took over. I boarded the bus, which turned north onto Bailey Avenue. With an empty seat and a sense of intrigue lingering, I opened a book, and I was happy to discover that I was able to effortlessly dive into its message, still believing that meaning, however elusive, could be found in the most unexpected places. Even when we have failed to do so.
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Lehrkraft Plus@jpmantil Hi Juan, Good to see you here and to read more of your writing. I feel like this project has some echoes of what you wrote earlier about books, and I guess books and buses and subway carriages all have a similar shape, so maybe there's a way to connect the two projects. Your details about catching the subway and it feeling like a prize when you arrive just in time are great. I really enjoyed that. It's such a universal feeling, I think. I definitely felt like that in London, and now here in Madrid. It's as if there's some kind of cosmic order we're in sync with when the train pulls up as we step onto the platform!
My suggestion would be to make the worst thing more personal, and maybe come up with a couple more worst things. I'm not sure it's as universal to be bothered by people talking loudly to the whole carriage :) I'd rather have that than people eating their dinner on the subway. I think there's always a risk when making general statements.
I enjoyed the litter scene and how he interprets what's there. Go into more detail, enjoy the specifics of the pieces of litter and the signs they may hold. By mentioning the Tarot and the I Ching, it also makes sense that he would spend time "reading" the litter. Check out Geoff Ryman's novel 253 – I think you'll like it.
Thanks for your participation and for sharing your project with us. It feels like a fun project to do. Keep us posted! Warm greetings from Madrid (where, more often than not, there are seats available on the Metro!).
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@shaun_levin Dear Shaun, This is great. Thank you so much for your feedback. I knew you had something very valuable to add. I agree that usually people are annoyed by different things, and I wasn't aware of that when I wrote this.
I have a question. For the part about reading the litter, I left it open on purpose, I didn't want to get too deep or abstract. At the same time, I wanted to add some levity to the situation. Any thoughts about that? Does it feel like the reader will get more if I come up with something rather than the absurdity of the whole thing?
Thank you! I am looking forward to connecting with you soon!
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Lehrkraft Plus@jpmantil I would definitely add a reading of the litter. The absurdity of it will actually make the scene more believable. Take your notebook to a place with litter and write what you see, or even using pictures from the Internet could work. I think you'll be surprised how much fun and relevant the exercise can be :)
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@shaun_levin Thank you! Shaun, I will do it. I'm sure it's going to be a fun exercise.
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Hi Juan,
I really enjoyed your synopsis--such a great concept for a book!--and the passage. The touching personality of the narrator emerges clearly from this short piece and the descriptions of waiting on the platform, the contrast between the dad's point of view and the narrator's, and looking at the litter are especially vivid. I did agree with Shaun that someone talking loudly isn't always the worst thing and that something more personal and perhaps described in more detail might work better. If the narrator does think a person talking loudly is the worst thing, maybe having him describe a particularly egregious experience of this might help readers understand why? I also wanted to mention Molly Dineen's classic documentary film The Heart of the Angel, about workers and passengers of the London Underground Angel station. It might be of interest since it has a similar focus. https://player.bfi.org.uk/subscription/film/watch-heart-of-the-angel-1989-online. Thanks for sharing this wonderful writing and the intriguing character you've created!
Elizabeth
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Hi Elizabeth,
Thank you so much for reading my synopsis and for your feedback. I truly appreciate and I am delighted to see that someone else read my writing. Thank you!
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